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Aileus commented Ch 11 The Truth of the World & A Surprise
@Creed Honestly I agree with you, please continue to read on however as things will be fleshed out and explained in the future better than back here - this is my first novel I'm writing full time so grasping the pace has literally been a pain in the ass, however I want to improve in the future as an Author so this criticism is priceless. Thank you for taking the time to read and give me feedback :)